The last three days we have making another show don't tell. I think I found this one more fun because it wasn't so strict and structured. I hope you like it.
Reflection:
I think next time I could add: less and a bit more action to make it more exciting. Other than that I think it was pretty good.
Kia ora Hunter,Kedjron here.I really like your pice of writing and how you did show don´t telland how you explained your recount.Keep up the god work.Blog ya later
ReplyDeleteKia ora Kedjron,
DeleteIt's Hunter from your class. I just wanted to say thank you for your positive comment! Thanks for commenting on my blog! Ka pai.
Kia ora Hunter,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the way you used the five senses and Show, Don't tell to describe your mountain biking adventure. Maybe next time you could work on proofreading and checking your spelling. Blog ya later! Ms Peters.
Kia ora Ms peters,
DeleteIt's Hunter from your class. Thank you for adding a positive comment on my blog!
Hi Hunter my name is Tiana and I am a year seven student at Paihia school. I really like your blog post about your Challenge…. Show and Tell. I like it because you have alot of good words to make me wanna read your writing. I also like how you have a photo of a bike as your background to show me what you were talking about. I havent done this before but I hope to do this in the future.
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Hi Hunter my name is Jade, I am a year 8 student at Paihia School. I really like your blog post about “ Show not tell” because it is very interesting and I like how you have added your DLO to help people understand what you are saying. I have never done a blog post about “ show not tell” before but you said that you enjoyed it so I would like to give it a go. What made you want to blog post about show not tell?
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